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is this a good comic book story?
(i made this up its not done though)Joshua Scott was born in the slums of Bronx, NY he watched his parents and sisters being killed in a massive gang crossfire he was sent to an orphanage at the age of 12 there he spent most of the time studying by the time he was eight-teen he received a major scholarship in one of the most prestigious tech schools in the world he later started his own company developing high tech weapons for the army . he soon found out that the crime lord that killed his parents came back he sought revenge he took the name black hawk and designed his own Anti-Gravitational armor and wings:his wings are also remote controlled so in case he losses them or needs to reach small places he just uses the control, he has a sonic Hair Loss Device pulse gun that simulates a hawks screech and disables any electrical device in a five mile radius, in his belt he has , tracking chips , mintuer shock wave bombs that paralyzes any one for a about 10 minutes , his helmet has a very powerful hearing device that once you look in to a target you can listen in to your targets conversation so he has ears as a hawk , and the eye sight of one his helmet can zoom in 300x so he can see a bout three miles away. and when ever hes Joshua Scott he just pushes the buckle of his belt and he trans forms into black hawk. well back to the story upon hearing of the crime lord he went of to avenge his family . the crime lord had all sorts of robots but they weren’t any match for the sonic pules gun then a couple of one hundred men came in but he used he is minuter bombs that paralyzed all of them he went in but there was a narrow hall and at the end the door but there were lazers every were so he used his remote controlled wings and disabled the security he opened the door and there he was with rage he went in and almost killed him but he remembered what his father said ” even if you are not ready for day it can’t always be night” so he speared his worth less life and took him to a police department some people call black hawk a hero others a vigelanti, some even a threat but i call him meReal Name:Joshua ScottOccupation:President / founder of Hawk Enterprises, Crimefighter, Billionaire playboyPlace Of Birth : Bronx,NYLocation:Bronx,NYCitizenship: U.S.AKnown Relatives: NoneHeight6′0″Weight190EyesBrownHairblack
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